Summary of the Mond Chapter
110,000 words, with many foreshadowings that can only be revealed in the later stage, and enough story lines that run through the whole story.
Because Mondstadt is the starting point of the journey, or it may become the end point of the journey in the future, so I put all the foreshadowings here.
From the author's point of view, this volume was written a little hastily, and there are many places that are not satisfactory, such as the place where the foreshadowing was laid at the beginning, such as the way parents are addressed.
Of course, I have just entered the industry for less than half a year, and I may have only written about one million words (my backstage told me that I wrote 700,000, but I actually have a Yelan fan fiction of more than 200,000 words on the external site)
The image of Moyu in my heart... Let me borrow a word from a book friend, he should be the kind of person who helps each other internally and is decisive and domineering externally, because in the world of fame and fortune, if you are not domineering, you will be bullied (refer to Mondstadt and Winter Solstice).
Another thing is the positioning of Moyu. I spoke in a very respectful tone at the beginning completely because of my family education and some of my... personal thinking.
I mainly want to use the change of pronouns to represent Mo Yu's emotions. For example, at the beginning, he had just returned from public relations outside and was not very used to the environment at home, which is commonly known as "not getting the position right". Then, because of a word from his mother, he was completely broken, and then he realized that he was now at home, not wandering outside with evil spirits. In the end, Bai Wen came to deliver a letter, which was completely foreshadowing, an introduction to the Liyue chapter.
As for the title of "Mother", in my opinion, it is completely used to pass the message, at least to render the kind of emotion of being righteous and resolute to set out, so I used three pronouns to keep changing, instead of not changing them uniformly.
Of course, it may be that my writing style is problematic and I didn't handle this part well. In fact, now I think it may be much better to write a little bit of psychological activities.
Besides, the title of Ningguang Lord, Moyu was able to rise to the position of Yaoguang Star because of Ningguang. In private, he can call Ningguang by name, or call Ningguang Mr. or teacher, but in public, whether it is Keqing talking to Ningguang in public during the Lantern Festival, or choosing to reflect history, even officials of the same rank must show respect to each other and call others Lord.
So I think there is really nothing to pick on in terms of the title.
As for Moyu's reaction to Ningguang, I think the biggest objection is the sentence "I will do whatever you tell me to do".
I didn't think much when writing this sentence, I admit that this may cause a lot of misunderstandings, but in fact, it makes sense.
Politically speaking, Moyu is Ningguang's student. If Moyu is sent by Ningguang to do anything, it is Ningguang who does it as a teacher, not as a Tianquan Star.
Think about it from another angle. For the other seven stars, they don't know whether Moyu was sent out by Ningguang this time. Whether Moyu was busy working because of the expiring foreign trade contract or because of Ningguang's order, they don't know.
Because only a few people knew that Moyu was going to Mondstadt because of Ningguang's arrangement. These people were either Moyu's relatives or Ningguang's right-hand men. Even if they knew, Ningguang could explain it by "letting Yelan be the examiner to see if Moyu is qualified to become a master."
If you say at this time, "Why did you write so much? Isn't this pure nonsense?" What I want to say is that I can't stand the pressure of part of it, so I wrote these contents that were originally supposed to end at the end of the Liyue main line and take over the affairs of the Dragon King Ruotu after Osel died in advance. These are all foreshadowings I buried in the Mondstadt chapter.
Of course, in my opinion, they are convinced by Ningguang. When the server was just launched, there was a comment from Kaiyang Star on Ningguang's character portrait, saying that Ningguang is the biggest secret of the entire Liyue Port. This can also represent the attitude of some Seven Stars towards Ningguang to a certain extent.
Although Keqing doesn't get along with Ningguang, she will still follow the arrangement of this senior to do civil engineering work, and will also go to Qunyu Pavilion to quarrel with Ningguang and exchange views.
Even the other Seven Stars turned a blind eye to Ningguang's indulgence of Beidou. That is the Death Star, which is an armed pirate team. They may be the armed force cultivated by Ningguang in secret, and Ye Lan is also the person Ningguang trusts the most. Even the two lists of threats to Liyue in the General Affairs Department were made by Ye Lan alone.
One has an absolute intelligence advantage and occasionally gets involved in disputes and business wars between people. Who dares to guarantee that there is no shadow of Ningguang behind this?
The subordinates intervened in the business war and disputes on behalf of Ningguang, and the other team had a strong armed force. These things were added together. According to the logic that "Ningguang ordered Moyu, the Seven Star, to order the other Seven Stars, became the boss of the Seven Stars, and made them unhappy and made Liyue unstable", wouldn't the other Seven Stars have started to make trouble a long time ago?
With powerful armed forces, top intelligence networks, and even a high possibility of representing Ningguang to interfere in various things in Liyue Port, the other Seven Stars would not resist at this time? Because Ningguang could completely kick them out one by one.
What is the reason? Because Ningguang was personally appointed by the Emperor of the Immortal Ceremony, they could not overthrow Ningguang even if they had ten thousand guts. This is why Ningguang tolerated Beidou, and this is why Ningguang could support Moyu to the top!
Finally, there is only one update today. I didn't sleep last night, and I got crazy this morning, and then deleted the things at the beginning. Now I really want to rest.
I once wanted to finish the first month of this book and then run away, but I feel that I have been in the industry for half a year and have not written a complete story seriously. I want to let the two books I have on hand finish normally.
Oh, by the way, if you think I have used inappropriate words or used the wrong idioms, please remember to x-on:me in the background, because from today onwards I will no longer read comments, and as for inappropriate words and the like x-on:I will delete them after correction.
I have written more than 2,000 words without realizing it, and I sigh again at the end.
I really want to write this story in a way that...similar to the feeling that every chapter is not a water text, whether it is the emotional line or the plot line, every word is useful.
But now it seems that this idea is too picky about readers. Maybe it will be better in Dian Niang or Hedgehog. Tomato readers like short, fast and refreshing stories, and this kind of fan fiction with too many foreshadowings is still not acceptable.
Maybe I should follow my original idea and write a rule-based weird story?
Forget it, I'll just stop here
2024/2/26 Feng Jiuxiao